Мотивационное письмо на английском

[LadyLara]

Доброго времени суток !

Моя подруга собирается поступать и пишет мотивационное письмо и проект на английском. У меня с английским не очень. Может быть, кто-то может покритиковать ? Заранее спасибо !

Dear Sir, Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in the Intensive Diploma in International Management. Looking to acquire and practice the managerial skills necessary for successful performance in tourism industry, this program appears to be a wonderful fit with my professional experience, personal interests, and career goals.
I already have an academic background with my Master Degree in Services & Tourism (University of Saint-Petersburg, Russia), as well as a solid track record of executive know-how. Throughout my 6 years of professional experience as a communication/event manager in a major French group, I have obtained a proper understanding of international operations, client approach and creative management. Now I am familiar with planning and supervising multicultural projects and have the ability to implement effective enhancements for corporate image. However, while these years have given me invaluable experience, I believe that I have reached a plateau in developing skills necessary to achieve my ultimate career goal.

Today I would like to move back to my first passion - the tourism & hospitality industry. I have always been a passionate person whose biggest desire is the overcoming of challenges. I feel that now is the right time to face another professional defy and going to international hospitality school definitely represents that challenge.

After weeks of research, your school was my preferred choice for various reasons. First of all, your school is ranked among the top hospitality schools worldwide. I’m sure that it’s a result of high quality programs integrating Swiss quality hospitality education and its virtues of excellence, rigour, tradition and innovation.
The hotel industry is one of the most intercultural sectors in the world and I believe that at your school I will develop an ability to work in multicultural environment, to learn how to deal with different cultures, working and studying with students from over 60 nationalities.
Finally, as your program delivers both essential theoretical bases and practice in an international hospitality establishment, it represents a solid step towards my future career. In fact, I believe that professional experience is just as crucial as the rigorous academic study. Thanks to the 6-month internship I’ll have the chance to put into practice the theoretical knowledge and to face real work situations.
For all these reasons I see the Postgraduate Intensive Diploma in International Hotel Management as a wonderful next step for me in attaining my ambitions.
I thank you for the opportunity to submit this application for your consideration. I look forward to communicating with you in the near future.
Thank you for your time and consideration,

Faithfully,